The Day The Earth Drank Swill (screenplay attempt)

[Tard]

Been spending last couple of weeks spare time fiddling with this story, trying to craft an outline into a screenplay, but now that it's become rather beefy (if you can call 26-pages for a 90-minute feature 'beefy'), nobody can spare the time reading the friggin thing anymore!

It's only from a Word97 document saved as HTML, so some of the formatting was fucked. Tabs & borders & line breaks/spacing were saved not completely like the original document, rather as the computer saw fit.

Also note the last 30% of the screenplay hasn't been fully fleshed-out yet. Still in the process of being written, so skipped over most dialogue and focused primarily upon how to END the story, so it's rather abbreviated.

BUT, except for Lucas and his Prequels, movies aren't written in a bubble. So far, this has been written in a vacuum but I'd really appreciate some comments and criticism about the story, and any gaping plot-holes or forgotten characters along the way brought to my attention. Continuity is a messy point for me.

Thanks,

THE DAY THE EARTH DRANK SWILL.

<font color="#a62a2a" size="1">[ February 01, 2006 06:28 PM: Message edited by: reved ]</font>

[miker]

dude, IMO it's really difficult to read with that formatting (in Safari everything is underlined).

[Tard]

What's Safari, your browser? Does it underline everything on other web pages, cause it's only a simple HTM page, nothing special went into the code.

Have an older copy, less worked on, saved as Acrobat Reader.

Acrobat Reader Format

[jb_617]

It doesn't underline everything in FireFox and it's quite readable. I'm working through it now and I'll try and post some feedback later.


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Crash different.

[Tard]

Thanks, a lil more feedback wouldn't hurt. Got some very helpful comments from numerous other websites, so there's lots of changes coming.

Should have a copy of FinalDraft 7.1 in the next few days, so formatting f-ups will be taken care of, I'll also get rid of writing "CUT" so often. I'll rewrite the grays to show more clearly they're less intelligent than primates, but the cattle-mutilation robots (despite their promiscuity due to an overabundance of genitals) are the brains behind UFO sightings.

I'll shutup and just put it in the next version of the script.